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Dad!

DAD! as your daughter,
I must protest.

Don’t talk about sex,
Eeewww.
It makes me want to spew.

You know I love you
and will forever more.
But “please” dad,
SHUT THE TOILET DOOR!

Don’t kiss mum in front of me,
or any of that muck.
Yuck!

Don’t walk around in your y-fronts,
You never know what I might see!
Uck-a-v.

It grosses me out!

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Uck-a-v is a Welsh word that means horrible/disgusting. I don't know if there is a correct spelling for it.
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Yeah we dads can tend to get a bit careless in what we do around the house. Always can use a good laugh..............stan

Ha ha - Glad it bought a laugh - daughters and their dad's. What a wonderful relationship! He he

Thanks Stan - Keep safe over there in beautiful South Carolina.

Love Mand xxxx

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My, it’s gross with

so take care
close your eyes
lest he
your dad ....forgets
and
mom has no regrets

are you his original one
hopefully
else mom is enjoying
some fun
what else....

loved

You never know what you might see! . Lol My daughter runs if she sees her father in just his pants. Holes have a habit of appearing in his y fronts! ( wear and tear ). Don't tell him I told you that! he he.

Thanks LOved - glad to have you come by.

Love Mand xxxx

Sorry about the irritating capital O

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it just happened
a casual oversight
why have holes all over ...
well rest I leave it to open imagination
i have seen many a guy drop his
in front of kids
to show off
as if twere a .. ....well 4 get it knock it off

lO ved

loved

A good write and you should post it on a door someplace in the house lol
I would love to see the expression on his face after reading it.
Yours Ian.T, Who brought up a family and never showed his w---- LOL
Fell off the floor laughing everything seems upside down today..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

His w... or the other dangly bits. Ha ha ha. What a laugh! True though.

Thanks Ian xxxx

Still laughing at your comment...haha

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I think I'm going to have a stroke! ha ha I can't stop laughing!

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You are mentioned on the web Search so you is Famous LOL.

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Aug 9, 2013 - Uck-a-v is a Welsh word that means horrible/disgusting. I don't know if there is a correct spelling for it. Editing stage: Editing - rough draft.

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Uck-a-v is a Welsh expression for disgusting/horrible. Not sure if there is a correct spelling for it! © Amanda Newman. All rights reserved, on 3 months ago ...
Just put your word in search and there you are LOL
Digit is still away some place not sure if he has left the valleys yet lol.
He has found another Blackwood in his quest for bad place names, as he was in Wales he couldn't understand the names.
You may see him soon , Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Brilliant I can't wait to let my husband know he's famous for the holes in his pants! Ha ha and his dangly bits. Ahhh ha ha

I see Digit is on there as well - I'm pleased to see he will get the notoriety he deserves! What a character you have so skilfully weaved.

Thanks for letting me know.

Loads of love - Mand xxxxx

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I re-streamed "I felt the earth" so that you could see the one I wrote about when I was in Wales, Yours Ian.T
PS:- you is famous, I haven't checked on Sparrow yet lol

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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