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entwined serpentined

Submitted by loved on Sun, 2013-08-04 23:46

nothing lesser than exotic
the simmering and the shivering
quivers aroused
all over the silken
eel like curvaceous body
serpentined
entwined
and
dipped in white wine

sweet as the rose’s liqueur
if ever you've tasted
supine oozes the fruits of love
tasty
and
luscious too
who won't relish the sword
with which slice
Oh one time lover you

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Mon, 2013-08-05 14:09

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Just us two in the undiscovered place, it is such a pity that there are so few that can even think of looking in here for new poetry or old comments LOL.
You are doing it again Putting in your comments as a poem separate.
Still it is full of feelings and visuals that jog my memory what ever a memory is.
Not a bad write there young Bard, now beetle off to that undiscovered place and give me a hand out, so that I can join the stream, lol.
Yours as always Ian.T

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loved

Mon, 2013-08-05 14:51

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well you know what
need I have to say it

loved

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