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Touching the Divine

Submitted by bossladyone on Mon, 2013-07-29 21:55

On the hard cold floor I lay awake and pray
Silently, I cry out loud, 'Where are you Lord?"
If I could only find you deep in my mind
I search for that one sign, that you are near me
Listening to all of my innermost thoughts

It is not funny how I don't smile anymore
My laughter has been ripped, torn
With the one joy I had how can I find closure?
I try hard to move forward

How can I explain anguish inside of me
Without a list, why I need to be content?
Content with the worlds foot on my neck, no love
Dreaming dreams that are never reached, there's no love
The love that once consoled me, I can not touch

Desert flowers grow in the wild
There's no rain to quench their thirst
It's like a child's smile when doing wrong
And love pours out with a burst

I will never accept this is all there is
When inside of me I have so much to give
You are my sanctuary, I can go and hide
For so long the pain I fought, you take and heal
The pathway to truth, the real me, is revealed

I listen to all the sad songs on the radio
Now all the lyrics I know
I understand them so much more than yesterday
The meaning touches that way

Take what is wrong and make better what is right
Reaching out with my being, touching the divine
Knowing there is something inside, no doubt
Walking the walk that leads somewhere, there's no doubt
All the doubt has left me lying awake on the floor

Desert flowers grow in the wild
There's no rain to quench their thirst
It's like a child's smile when doing wrong
And love pours out with a burst

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Ian.T

Tue, 2013-07-30 02:47

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A well written piece though so negative, keeping the pain going by sad songs and rotating the thoughts again and again.
If you stay on the roundabout all you do is go in circles and the world rushes by so fast that you will never see the changes, if you know what I mean.
If this is fiction then OK but if fact then good luck,
Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

bossladyone

Tue, 2013-07-30 10:55

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Thank you so much for your feed back. I understand what you mean. Although things are not like that in my life now. I have been there many times and I always seem to come back.

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lonlyhrtsclub13

Tue, 2013-07-30 10:53

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Is such a powerful thing......captures the feeling that one feels when something or someone is lost to them (whether it be death or a bad breakup etc.) I know the part about sad songs all too well...while music is forever a source of release for me, some lyrics just tear at my heart as they represent my circumstances so well...we all have wounds that we have to heal from, some never seem to go away no matter how much we try...an uphill battle I fight on a daily basis...beautiful read...good job

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

bossladyone

Tue, 2013-07-30 10:57

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Thank you so much for your feed back. Your interpretation of the poem was very interesting to me. I am glad that you were able to put yourself there also so that you could have your understanding of the poem. I hope that life is not always challenging for you and that your grief has turned to smiles

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lonlyhrtsclub13

Tue, 2013-07-30 11:02

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The great thing about poetry is drawing your own interpretations and meanings from the words...what you draw from it is your own and makes the piece stand out in your own mind...to have the ability to make others see those things through your work and to personalize it with their own circumstances is a talent...thanks for the read...

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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