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If you so don't desire

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2013-07-22 12:33

If you so don't desire
let me not in your veins
ignite a blazing fire
alas it's your domain
a kind suggestive poet
I shall always remain

but permit you to cross my lane
to say what the hell
where do you live
go clean up while time there is still

but then add
on yeah I leave it to your will
you only compose poetry
to your useless
not invaluable time
to kill
so do as you will….

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Mon, 2013-07-22 22:20

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that anyone who has read a lot of your work, could say that your time is useless or not valuable. One has to muddle through some of your poems, but that is part of the beauty of your work. I am never bored with the things you write. Puzzled sometimes, but never bored. Good writing, ~ Gee

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loved

Mon, 2013-07-22 23:01

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so very grateful

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Ian.T

Wed, 2013-07-24 18:38

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A write that meant quite a bit to a few.
A look at wastage there young Bard
How we struggle sometimes with words
Also those feelings come through twisted a little.
Still we know you young one and read each piece
Then out of all those words as Gee says comes some words
Words that mean a lot and are formed in their right column's
This is one of those writes that touches us here
The picture is true, Yours as always Ian.T

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loved

Wed, 2013-07-24 20:24

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clicked by over 6000 in one day
yahoo mailed me
AM I a real poet
ask Jess
where is he??

loved

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-07-25 03:29

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Jess is away on holiday, he has said that he will be back as soon as possible, something about a walkabout lol.
He wants to bring in some changes to enhance Neopoet, probably on the walkabout he has had time to assess Neopoet and the way it is going.
He is a great teacher and is an asset to Neo.
Don't forget to VOTE this week !!!!
Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2013-07-25 09:39

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shall r u on the list

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-07-25 10:08

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I have been asked a few times to stand for the AC but my knowledge of poetry is not good enough to do so. My knowledge of life is but I will keep that for comments lol
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2013-07-25 10:36

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ur like me
i know lill poetry only

loved

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