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The Invisible Man

I pass, like the
Autumn breeze rustling the leaves
Lips brush you your cheek, like
the kiss of the Spring Sun

Faint, a moonlit shadow.
Dark, an ashened abyss.

Your heartbeat echoes
in the dark of mine
My touch whispers
snaking around your skin

A ghost in your thought
My eyes a glimpse in yours

Breath shared
A heart seen...

NGJ 2013/06/24

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Editing stage: 


A much better write, than the first I read the other day.
Spirit or ghostly like, to touch yet not be there, in some strange way, as if a loss of someone, where the memory lets you play as you would like.
Good for the imagination,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I like the mystery, the ability to let the reader form their own visuals and interpretation. Very nice.

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Thank you for the comments.

I am glad the singleness came through.

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