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some distant drums did beat
distant drums did beat
that lonely night
when I was all alone
sleeping in the veiled forest
life seemed to drudge along
there was none to hear my song
in the far distant time at night
I heard drums on my transistor
some folks were like me
in a far off jungle merrying
they must have been lonely too
but they were enjoying
as much as I wished to
I threw off the blanket
went into the open stark naked
none could have seen me
as I danced with abandoned glory
when I reentered my tent
torches flashed at me
guys were watching unabashedly
now they clapped for me..
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Comments
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-06-30 18:28
Loved
You is a big exhibitionist, some with the torches you may have put to shame the others would just smile LOL.
For some reason I liked this write from one of your comments again, and can't recall where, I shall stream some more in a few days or so am having a break am a little tired.
Take care young Bard, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Sun, 2013-06-30 23:23
u sure are right
creativity is inspirational
ever
loved
Seren
Mon, 2013-07-01 10:14
Your slipping lol I can see you
Like Ian I liked this write I am gathering its from one of your comments but it just has a different feel to your normal
nicely done
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Mon, 2013-07-01 10:39
i feel so happy when
you and Ian walk my stride
and
your true feelings never hide
I have now been slipping less
more I've been sleeping
as anyone could tell
as not many read poetry
I guess
oh hell!
loved