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the dance of death
I have been watching
as the tendrils of life
drift off and away
casting shadows
on her soul
in a waning light
I felt the touch of faith
nails indented my knees
and palms, now laying down
I feel my heart shift
into a peaceful stillness
slowly it started
sliding in a sepia light
I now held her hand
tracing the infinity symbol
into her palm
now we silently wait
as death dances in the shadows
Style / type:
Free verse
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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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Comments
Rula
Tue, 2013-06-04 07:53
Dear Jayne
This is touching though I don't figure every image yet I feel sadness through out. Is everything alright at your end. Is this about someone sick or dying and special for you?
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Seren
Wed, 2013-06-26 08:57
Dear Rula
First off sorry for the delay in answering, We did have two deaths in our family and its part of the reason I havent been around much, I am still working on this one thanks for the read and your thoughts
sincerely Jayne- Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Shyanne18
Tue, 2013-06-04 12:04
LOVE IT
I think you may have written a new favorite of mine! Keep writing!
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Seren
Wed, 2013-06-26 08:59
Smile
thank you so much I am very happy you enjoyed it, sorry for the delay answering your message
sincerely Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats