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Ethereal Intwination

Submitted by Shamoneness on Thu, 2013-06-13 17:28

Rembranches reaching through
Heavenly hollows in the clouds
Tranquilly shaping unguided thoughts
of gardens in vasettes
deeply set in delerium

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

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Ian.T

Fri, 2013-06-14 09:21

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Though your words are from another place or time, they had the ability to paint a picture of a trance like floating bordering on the feverish..
Well I just can't find a meaning for several of your big words maybe they are local to where you live,
Yours Ian.T

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Shamoneness

Mon, 2013-06-17 18:32

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you! Ha, i wouldn't say they're local to where I live. I just like using big words.
& sometimes I make words up; like "Rembranches", for example.

Amber

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