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delilah

locks
like a key
turned

falling like tumblers
the reign in drips
beauties receivership

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from my own writing, so perhaps this is why I stand a little at odds with this poem. Also, the mention of tumblers seems to jar with what is in general (at least in my mind) a less suburban setting. What I enjoy about this poem is it's concise imagery and brutally narrow shape.

historical refrence yes..
and modern overlap...
Delilah was suburban
an edifice of such

not a battle place
nor quest route....

Narrow shape....

indeed!!

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wasn't he the lover

loved

serpents tongue
heady
castrated victory
shows
highlights in a tangled mane
desire ripped
reaped
cost uncloaked

your poety causes gasp's
thankyou

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