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life's sojourn

Submitted by loved on Thu, 2013-06-06 15:37

my sojourn of life is unique
you know I help many
along with me in tow
so many here have given me
love you know

so that's why I continue to go
from here to there
in the way I want to

life's sojourn

all follow me
some don't too
then for them I have only a word to say
let's on behalf of your souls pray
that you see some light some day

so my sojourn continues
with or without them
how I wish they knew,
the loss of my company
as I was sent from heaven
perhaps
they knew not of their mental lapse
my sojourn shall continue
with or without you
hopefully along with you..
my sojourn continues..

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-06-06 16:37

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A thought that could only come from Loved.
I liked this piece it gave substance to what you do and believe.
In your sojourn I do hope that others feed the light with theirs and in doing so will only let theirs grow.
There are things that some decry, is it because they are a little lost.
It is not a job for others to correct any belief only to enhance the fact that they exist.
It is good to walk with you, as it is with all we meet, the lessons they teach us are beyond value, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2013-06-06 16:59

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u take time
on a day as you are being reborn
rehearsal part
in 2013...
funny !

loved

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Seren

Fri, 2013-06-07 08:00

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You have the guts of a poem, play with it some more change some words around let it flow :) I will return in the edits

love JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Fri, 2013-06-07 10:01

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each day I return

to Neopoets
I only wish you were on my page
you help me walk on my life's stage
coolly, without any rage
calm I always remain
in your poetic domain
come and read what I have to say
may it be your happy day,
as edits on my poems you display,
I choose those only
for my fifty one
ere the scorching sun
so those alone may shine
when guys and gals
in the moonlight dine...

loved

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