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oh my Niagara

Niagara Falls
I only wish you had been to Niagara
romance never ends there ever,
I would love to have one each day
come what may
winter spring or snow
the Niagara always does love grow

and upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow

how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
to make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally flow

now stop short
you hearts palpitate
take a car
a flight right away
stay at any lovely
Niagara fall s over looking place
do stay
so your romance will bloom
that’s what I can surely say.

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Niagara holds a special place or me. The raw power the water is a humbling experience to behold. It draws the primal emotions from anyone who experiences it, love being a central one!

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

being partially deaf
I still can hear it
Thanks sailor
you are welcome to Niagara

loved

author comment

This just quite didn't flow as Niagra does, I was there in the 70's it was beautiful.
The temp was -12 C and there was no mist at the time I was there, up in the Skylon I went with camera, and took some great pic's of the falls..
My love was at 1000 ft up in the CN tower of Toronto but that was back in 1978, it was a great year, for me and the memory has kept my soul on edge ever since, and thats only 35 years two months ago lol.
Take care young Bard have a go at the flow, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

this is the first time i came by long tyme no

I enjoyed this piece. Read it three times. I had a bit of a stumble right after the first Stanza.

and upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow

how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
to make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally flow

I thought these small changes helped this a lot. Remove the “and” in front of first line then join the two lines that are above the second stanza, to the second stanza. Helps the rhyme in that stanza also. Maybe you meant to keep all the lines together. That’s all I have!
But just my opinion. Nice feeling piece!

upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow
how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
to make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally flow

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow
how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
to make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally flow

Niagara Falls

I only wish you had been to Niagara
romance never ends there ever,
I would love to have one each day
come what may
winter spring or snow
the Niagara always does love grow

upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow
how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
to make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally flow

now stop short
you hearts palpitate
take a car
a flight right away
stay at any lovely
Niagara fall s over looking place
do stay
so your romance will bloom
that’s what I can surely say.

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