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D E S U L T O R I U S

Submitted by Esker on Mon, 2013-05-13 14:02

carouse damp bright
heavy hearted this dance
floating nimble limbed

our wicked waters wend
appetite whetted
strands of history swallowed
beneath the hurtful pity
of our time

chilled brilliant
our love stalled like a sigh
the words begging beyond
the crowd

drape a touch beneath
depths
falling
leaping in grief

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ida

Mon, 2013-05-13 14:38

gust shredded veil
half mast roost
like a buddist prayer flag
snapping wishes
blood red
the tulip blooms
unconcerned

love stalled like a sigh
thank you

Geezer

Tue, 2013-05-14 07:44

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of the context in which I should read this.
I'm thinking that it may concern a romance that is but isn't,
proceeding in fits and starts.
Most of time, your words are strung together so sibilantly,
that I don't really care what the intent is. This intrigues me though. ~ Gee

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