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Cascading

Give me a view to remember
You know the favourite one
naked-obviously

My daily thrill wrapped up
in skin dewy

The hair fresh from processing
swathes in molton sheets
like a hooker wearing
a synthetic wig

Draping precious threads
smothering masculine
contours

Skin hair sweat
trickling between
soft crags

Your tumescence
piercing silver curtains
sprayed with
cascading comfort

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Comments

your work mesmerizes me
if Im not prompted sometimes
in its meaning the depth is felt

thank you!

Good to see ya. Now exactly where should we meet? Be forewarned you might need track shoes so as to be able to run off screaming after seeing my excuse for "smothering masculine contures lmao. But seriously this is a fine poem of desire for it is concise without being pernographic. You might consider changing "naked-obviously" to
Naked
obviously
Might give the reader a bit more of a pause to visualize the person they want to see that way................Now to a cold shower lol........stan

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