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Boy Wonder
rumpled jeans outlandish jersey
tussled hair grass stained hi tops
rolled up pant legs
a study in concentration
serious business
the lawnmower whirrrs
a Fisher Price song
in random fashion
over newmown grass
green stained shoes
testimony to his calling
helping dad cut the lawn
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Comments
Ian.T
Sat, 2013-04-20 09:55
Joe
This boy worries me where did he come from is he a mutant..
A helper to his Father..???
Good write enjoyed the change, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Frenchf
Sat, 2013-04-20 17:17
I loved your ability to describe him
And I thought he came across as just such a nice young man. Thank you for the image in this good piece
Josephus
Sun, 2013-04-21 06:21
Thanks Ian and Frenchf
The poem came about as I was walking the neighbourhood and saw a four or five year boy with his toy lawn mower mimmicing his father as he cut the grass. Dad was careful to keep the boy behind him as he cut and the boy was cery serious about following the instructions following his father by about a meter and a half while his toy whirred on!
Thanks again,
Joe
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.
loved
Wed, 2013-06-19 09:58
very beautiful we also let
our kids do and follow
at safe distance
as you are from Canada you know
half the year
we cut grass,
the other half we clear snow
all our cash earnings
out they flow
and
all don't have engineering firms
that of course you know
loved