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Peace

Submitted by bossladyone on Mon, 2013-04-15 12:49

I will hold on to my peace
When everything is falling apart
All my happiness has ceased
And I am hurting in my heart

I will keep my peace strong
At times when alone I am facing trials
When everyone has turned and gone
My peace will be my survival

I will let my peace guide me
In the chaos of a decaying society
Stripped of being truly free
Dictated to by economics bounty

I will hear my peace call
When all around me is war
And in battle men die and fall
On mothers' hearts battle scars are bore

My peace I will walk with
Looking to God in my heart
My spirit His love will lift
Knowing He’s the master of this art

I will hear my peace call
When anger wells up inside
And I feel like I am in a freefall
Because of all injustice applied

I will let my peace guide me
When life's journey becomes unclear
I question my moral quality
Due to lack it causes fear.

I will keep my peace strong
Standing up for what I believe
When my differences seem wrong
Stay the course and just be me

I will hold on to my peace
This is my heart’s desire
This is how we all should be
Peace makes us so much kinder

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loved

Mon, 2013-04-15 14:03

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may peace be with you
but may you try
replacing peace
with other words
it will become a lovelier piece
may there be solace
with in as much without

loved

Ian.T

Tue, 2013-04-16 04:11

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It is good to hear of someone that can hold onto that peace of mind.
Yet I fear in your peace there is a reality missing, where you can join in with your God, and rush out and join others that are happy, sad , ill or just needy..
I felt left out of you poem where you and Your God had shut me off from being near, or is this just me ???? Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

bossladyone

Tue, 2013-04-16 11:29

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Thank you so much for your comments. Yes the poem is personal and does not allow for others to enter into my peace. That is why it is mine, but at the end of the poem I ask for others to seach for their own so that we all can find a degree of kindness toward each other.

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