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Morning

Silently she sleeps.
Arms outstretched in random fashion.
Body innocent in naked frankness.
Hair, rich golden billows, cloak her pillow.
A smile. face calm. Eyes gently closed.
Breasts rise in time to easy breaths.
Sun, filtered through lazy leaves from
Old oak trees, envelopes her and plays
shadow games on her demerara skin.
I trace her wondrous lines.
She mews and purrs
And softly moves to bring my hands
to play where her body needs they be.
My finger’s tips are gentle, slow and soft
Her moves are more insistent.
Her breath more quick, distraught.
I feel her body quicken to the tension I create.
I feel myself intense.
My hands in slow demanding moves
reach her golden inner thighs
That form a nest in which I lay
And move to meet her cries.
Insistent now. Faster now.
My kiss upon her throat.
She rises `neath my hardened self.
Her luscious ripeness spills.
I enter. We begin the dance
Of longing and uncaring.
To pain as pure as light.
To passion that has longed for
The oneness of delight.
Then in coupled madness
One being, one burst
Of energy, old, when the world was young
Now has been released!
With frenzied arcs of moaning limbs
We complete the other`s need
And now, still one, we softly kiss
And gently lay while yet as one
And kiss with quiet, lazy lips
The day, now ours, to share.

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I cant think of anything intelligent after reading that, WOW ! does come to mind ...

Bravo a gorgeous write I thoroughly enjoyed

I am going to have a shower now, smile

hugs JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I'm pleased that you found it an enjoyable read, JC. It seems to dovetail with Chine Doll quite well.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

author comment

I can see what you mean, companion pieces :) I will come back tomorrow and see if I can give some constructive advice, truely blew me away I loved it

hugs JC

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

author comment

sailorly and entwining
with a serpentine mind
lovely vibrations
the poems narrations
mine are rancid convulsions
no sailor I
no experience
but you are really magnificent
and sail through well
that's all now
I can tell

loved

I see what you mean! :-)

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

author comment

as long as you do
happy now
retired are you too

loved

I do what I do because it is essential to who I am. I'll never retire from that.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

author comment

I am on a laps top
24 hours still
jobless what !
am I still?

loved

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