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Shakespeare ala loved .....in creativity

thou dwellest with -in

ma heart

like dwellest

twas yesterday

and

thy love cometh

like a fountain

burstin all the way...

twill be a living life,

when twill be a game of friendship ...

hasn’t ever struck you

that we or twill be one poet...

like none as tomorrow comes

and

this day dieth

was that not anointed yet say

some shalt

some day

Shakespeare

and

Loved

lived like none else

on the ma earth

till dis day

so be it today

omen

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Free verse
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what you are trying to do here but, the proper spelling of the last word is Amen, or was that part of what you were trying to do? ~ Gee

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not ignorant..
it is i know
Amen!
but modernisation treatment
was the aim of this poem

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I know you are not naive, nor ignorant. I just made the mistake of forgetting it. ~ Gee

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Behave yourself, there is enough bastardisation of English each day on the TV as many tongues are spoken that resemble our basic way of talking.
Once the French tried to purify their language band failed miserably, and the older I get the more funny pronunciation of our way of talking becomes the norm. My spell checker is in English (UK) but still accept the USA way lol.
Honestly I didn't like this piece much it was too bitty I know it was like a skit on old and new but to me it didn't work.. Whoops what have I said, I am scuttling off to my cave, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

let others relish the dish

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I can see what you were trying to do and trying to modernise this one
but you just didnt pull it off for me, I think you have strayed off the path somewhat, backtrack some and start again ;)

sorry I cant even offer a crit I dont think I could be able to help you with this

love Jayne-Chloe x

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the forests are dark today
some will help my mind play

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Devil Beelzebub . Hope that wasn't what you meant!

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