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Wish You Enough

Saying good-bye to a friend
can sometimes seem unfair,

one tries to express things
showing they really care.

So I’m tackling this task
even though it’s quite rough,

I won’t say, “good-bye”
but, I wish you enough.

I wish you enough sunlight
to lessen your pain,

and to enjoy the sun’s grace
I wish you enough rain;

I wish you enough happiness
so you’ll enjoy every mile,

with just enough sadness
to appreciate a smile;

to satisfy your “wants”
I wish you enough “gain”,

and I wish you enough, “hellos”
for when “good-byes” just remain;

we make friends in a minute,
within an hour, know they’re true,

so, it only took me a day
to know, I’ll never forget you !

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one tries to express things
that shows that one cares?
Otherwise nice thoughts especially

to satisfy your “wants”
I wish you enough “gain”,

...this caught your keen eye. You're correct, you know. About the 2nd stanza, but I wanted not to have care be a plural, nes 'pa? I DID try to "fix it", though; what say you, now?
Thanx, again;
doc.

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brilliant write.
Absorbing.

Namaste,

Lenny

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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

...for your generous remarks. Made my day, sir.
Sincerely,
than, for that;
doc

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