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Washington IRiS Blues

Submitted by brittle light on Sat, 2013-03-16 03:53

wobbling close to a cliff
deep in shit
can't go forward
can't back up

the Man's up my ass
pushing His might
pay, and I'll stop
He swears
it's His right

lying, needy bastard
He's always horny for more

the Man has a hungry monkey on His back
...and a major ever-breeding greedy pack of steroidal goon-guards to feed

I'm starting to wonder
what's at the bottom of the cliff

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - draft

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Lenny of Cohen

Sat, 2013-03-16 08:42

people have been duped by the "ruling" classes for centuries. their is though, an awakening happening!

Loved these lines:- lying, needy bastard
He's always horny for more

the Man has a hungry monkey on His back
...and a major ever-breeding greedy pack of steroidal goon-guards to feed

Roll in the new Consciousness!

Namaste,

Lenny

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brittle light

Sat, 2013-03-16 13:58

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I don't think I am as politically concious as you seem to be....I'm a half-witted watcher of the political shenanigans
in the sense that I don't have a clue how to make it better.

One of my problems is that my life is ok, even in my relative poverty. I know there are many who are suffering greatly due to governments' fickle policies, and taxes, and greedy bastards etc. but I don't go looking victims and they are not in my daily line of sight. So.... until the crap starts hitting closer to home, I'll probably just keep on watching from a distance..... hoping those like you can find a sensible way to make a difference...

I'm not one of the bad guys, but not one of the good guys either. just a guy, confused

thanks, stay in touch

Al

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Frenchf

Sat, 2013-03-16 14:27

A plea of a rent boy!

brittle light

Sat, 2013-03-16 14:59

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I am not a prude, but never is my writing about sexuality in any shape or manner.
you are a dirty filthy girl (a big LOL) which is alright with me, but stop reading it into my writing. It's just not there!

maybe I am more of a prude than I think?!

oh!, well ...whatever gets you thru the night. These nights I just sleep, never giving a thought about my, or anybody else's sexual proclivities. I've lost the mojo....I"m definitly not 18 anymore.....and don't miss the mess of it all!

Al

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Frenchf

Sat, 2013-03-16 17:34

Ill try and write the plea of the rent boy shortly when I am in proper mode

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