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Anne's Refrain

Anne's Refraine

 

In wanting I wait
the sealing of fate
in the dank gloomy womb of my room.

I pace and I scratch
at the rust ridden latch.
"To scold and to hold.", I fume.

Time is a harpy
binding me sharply.
I bleed with misdeeds
to my doom?


When guilty they hail
handled, hauled from my jail.
Relief for my grief I presume.

In wet windows high
I know He draws nigh
a bloated blood stone.
I defy!



I'm taken queenly
standing serenely,
sweetly, King singing my love.

Grip-ripping the lace
surrounding my face
His love beads to hands I do shove.

Praying while saying,
"Forgiven." I'm shriven,
placing the gold in his glove.

There's no wave to save,
I walk to the block.
No reeling, just kneeling
Heaven opens above. .

 

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Structured: Western
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Didn't like the last verse much. Not the same tempo or feel. It's ok without it

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