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a jar of great magnitude
a half hinged
off plumb
ever-jamming
two handed yanker
and she still manages
a slam
on the way
out
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Brits, don't go there. It's American english, not British slang....I can hear your giggles already.
Editing stage:
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Comments
scribbler
Sun, 2013-03-03 19:37
hello
Some women can slam a door with a hydalic closer attatched lol..............stan
brittle light
Sun, 2013-03-03 20:29
hello Stan
they certainly can... and not metaphorically, or hyperbolically....
I still read your poems, and like most of them. I just find correspondence very tedious,,.so I don't !
thanks for the amusing comment on this piece. I wasn't sure if it was toooo cryptic ,( though not done purposely)
thanks,
Al
scribbler
Mon, 2013-03-04 01:16
hi Al
Don't worry about commenting. I might have time to give comment to maybe 1 out of 4 poems I read and critique to maybe ten percent if I'm lucky lol................stan
judyanne
Mon, 2013-03-04 10:00
hi al
lol - i was about to giggle when i read you comment, and then i giggled anyway
love it, and believe me - i have been known to slam a door or two in my time, and i'm little and not that strong either - we women just have a knack for it lol
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Ross Hamilton Hill
Mon, 2013-03-04 23:57
liked what I read but was
liked what I read but was hoping for more, ie what happened next?