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You carry me each day
.
In a dream of night before me rose
I walked along an endless shore;
moist sand glowed a silvery pink,
danced to lights in the waning sun;
its length moving, curved around
dotted stars in the form of a heart.
I peered ahead and looked behind,
shifted my gaze from side to side;
waiting to catch a glimpse of you
and fall within your gaze as you
engaged my eyes in an embrace,
but only feel the sighing wind.
The soft sand crunched under me;
a powdery kiss upon my soles.
Still I searched, marching onward,
past the crest into a dimpled vale,
and realised that I was inside you,
clear waters surrounded your days.
I then began to shut my eyes to see
and focus upon the things we share;
pulling together joined memories,
realising you had taken me there
into the core of your daily chores--
carrying me through your world
.
Comments
weirdelf
Sat, 2013-02-23 19:26
beautifully crafted and meaningful,
true emotion and not a hint of sentimentality.
You have excelled yourself.
cheers,
Jess
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crypticbard
Tue, 2013-02-26 06:44
Cheers Jess
That means so much to me, thanks for the succinct feedback. You are most appreciated.
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Ian.T
Mon, 2013-02-25 18:36
CB
A lovely piece and as Jess said very well written, it was a joy to read.
A truth of belonging as a part of something not touchable but there to caress in thought, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
crypticbard
Tue, 2013-02-26 06:46
Amen to that
Thank you, kindly, Ian. I am glad the Muse had allowed this "not touchable something" to be articulated in verse.
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'write on! let these words free.'
loved
Mon, 2013-02-25 22:49
simply marvelous poetry from you
simply marvelous poetry from you
.....and realised
that I was inside you
loved
crypticbard
Tue, 2013-02-26 06:48
That is so kind of you
I do try, you know :-)
Sometimes writing can be as easy as breathing
And there are moments it can be the most difficult thing to do.
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'write on! let these words free.'