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The Accidental Contestant

My reply may quick; betray
but, it is yours that morphs to grey;

I'm beside myself, and not from any lice !

I loathe to be me, is what's true
so, the only thing that I can do;

is pick two seats, and calmly sit down twice.

~

A plethoric myriad of thoughts
escapes my brain like small robots

coercing all pedestrians to pause;

good thing for them, the lights glowed, red
for over half, changed their minds, instead;

that break alone saved barrels full of gauze !

~

The orb is slick with indigo
before sunlight, we'll have to go.

or, run the risk of stalling at the gate;

our own dimension will emphatically
highlight all our integrity;

be mindful as you fill your dinner plate !

~

Obstreperously, we're weighed at birth
our job's to live up to our worth,

bow down to me, if you don't know the rules !

Decidedly, they are not fair,
for each one broken, you gain a pair;

overdo things, and they'll seat you with the fools !

~

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Structured: Western
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But what were you referring to?

...mr. fry. I guess it's towards some oddity of life. Without more details, we may never unearth the origin.
doc.

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You know, be born without much money in a small town or inner city, work menial jobs all your life, smoke, drink then conveniently die at 65.

Good work

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

...that's exactly how us classic gangsters do it !
:) doc.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
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Let confusion reign, there in the words are hidden thoughts that even to your eyes bring a question, later can you do a little edit to add some reason for this ramble.
I sometimes write something along this type, but then put to the notepad and edit until reason grants me an audience.
I shall await it's return lol with delicate notes of a format of reason, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

...I believe i grasp very well of what you speak.
Thanx, for the read, and repast;
doc.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
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