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Starlight

STARLIGHT

For you, my love, this Christmas time,
I only have this simple rhyme.
Though you, my love, deserve much more,
(You are the one that I adore)

If all the skies were empty; black,
No moon or stars to light your track,
Then I could set some sparkling stars
To light your way where 'ere you are.

And following your paths you'd see...
That every one leads back to me.

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Lovely sentiments, brilliant rhyming and meter.

Loved reading this one.

Love Mand xxxxxx

Glad you liked it, Mand. It should save me a fortune in christmas presents lol.
Merry Christmas !!

Ian xxx

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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Lol. (Expect her to expect a present under the tree.)

Lovely thought...."every path leads back to me." How long have you been married? Bless you both.

hugs,
Anna

At a party in Edinburgh, 1968, I met Anne. We were married in September 1969. thanks for the kind words Anna,

Merry Christmas !!!

Ian xx

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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Shirl, thank you for the encouraging words. I hope Santa is good to you

MERRY CHRISTMAS !!!

Love Ian xxx

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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I would sonnetise it if it flowed freely, but it seems to have the life-span that it has and I really don't want to pad it out . Thanks for the interest though and the suggestion. Really glad you like it,

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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