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armchair

Submitted by brittle light on Mon, 2013-02-11 02:51

smooshed gooshy in cushioning familiarity
not an edge left unrounded, soft
machinations abound

marshmellow chisels pound
dull and thudless
vainly seeking a peep hole to
hard, sharp, gritty,
full-tilt mojo boogying
soul

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Frenchf

Wed, 2013-02-13 00:52

Toilets, gay men? Correct?

brittle light

Wed, 2013-02-13 10:50

brittle light's picture

not that at all...but if that's what you think... that's what you get! We don't usually have the privilege of asking a writer what he "actually" meant. At least I don't...most of those whom I would like to ask something are dead, so I have to stay with my impressions or, stay confused, or write them off as "too cryptic, or simply bad writers etc....etc....

in this particular case, or in respect to any of my pieces, I take full responsibility for the inherent cryptic nature of poetry and my limits as a writer

thanks for reading and questions? Sorry, I am no better at explaning poems than I am at writing them.

reapectfully

Al

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