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CLOUD WATCHERS (Haiku)
Blue eyes blink open
across tattering gray sky
to watch storm depart
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Rula
Tue, 2013-02-12 12:22
Intriguing one stan!!
I've started enjoying writing them.
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scribbler
Tue, 2013-02-12 15:35
Hi Rula
I'm hoping that someone realizes what the "blue eyes" are. Thanks for coming by...........stan
Ian.T
Tue, 2013-02-12 18:52
Stan
The picture was complete, in this grand write, I look forward to the storm departing lol,
Yours Ian
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Tue, 2013-02-12 23:29
Hi Ian
A short poem for a short term view lol..........stan
Frenchf
Wed, 2013-02-13 00:03
Blue eyes wink open?
As the storm shatters?
Beautiful images of blue after the storm
Blue eyes peep?
scribbler
Wed, 2013-02-13 00:17
Hi Frenchi
I struggled between using winked or blinked and decided a wink carried too much of a closing connotation. Now PEEP is a different thing! I might need to "borrow" that for edit with your permission............stan
Frenchf
Wed, 2013-02-13 00:24
Be my guest
It is so lovely
Seren
Wed, 2013-02-13 09:01
hi Stan
This ones beautiful touching on the profound
Nothing to add its lovely as is
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Wed, 2013-02-13 09:45
Hi Jayne
Imagine that . An old grizzled bald headed guy like me even getting close to the profound lmao. Thanks for such kind comment.............stan