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those precious moments

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2013-02-04 02:00

those precious moments we search for
in the far recesses of our warped minds
we keep searching for solace,
as we leave time behind

and

march towards a stage
where rage

is the order of the day

and
page by page
we recall those very moments tall
we wish to time and again recall
but moments of momentum
are all so very few
we all love memories
how so ever old or new

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Free verse
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sueb

Mon, 2013-02-04 06:58

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yes precious memories much enjoyed cheers x

loved

Mon, 2013-02-04 07:13

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I must rather ought to
read you too
shall do

loved

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Frenchf

Mon, 2013-02-04 13:38

Words. Thank you

loved

Tue, 2013-02-05 01:44

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k

loved

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Geezer

Tue, 2013-02-05 15:25

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of yours that resonates with me. [Probably because I'm old and need my memories]. I particularly liked the lines;
"We recall those very moments tall
we wish to time and again recall
but moments of momentum
are all so very few
we all love memories
how so ever old or new"

~ Gee

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loved

Wed, 2013-02-06 01:00

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you have found reason enough
to traverse on my page
old we all are too in mind
and when one is blue..
and
so I have to thank you...

loved

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Roscoe Lane

Wed, 2013-02-06 01:18

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Yes we, do and this poem will be remembered by whoever reads it, great poem. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

loved

Wed, 2013-02-06 05:32

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to say so
regards

loved

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Ian.T

Wed, 2013-02-06 03:50

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This piece is of sadness where a feeling held of disappointment with life's gains, or course has not been kind.
We owe it to ourselves to grow old with dignity and the love of what we made of our lives.
Show me a person that can say I lived my life to all its values and well I will show you a liar..
A good write Loved and if you can see what you have written inside then you need to shake your values LOL...
Yours, with a load of spare unconditional love, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Wed, 2013-02-06 05:34

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A good write Loved
and if you can see what you have written inside

then you need to shake your values .....LOL. hahahahaaa
tanxaaaaaaaaaaaa.

loved

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