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DOUBLE VISION

I see you sitting over there
holding grandson in your arms
in your old Boston rocking chair
captured by an infant's charms

And I've seen that look before
years and decades in the past
contentment, love and so much more
a look I thought whose time had passed

So grandmadonna rock that child
the tiny son of second son
sing to him with pure voice, mild
another journey has begun

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lovely x

Thank you.............stan

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what more can I say - one to pass on this lovely child

Jenifer Jaspa James

and didn't say Hello
I was at the Mcdonalds
waiting for you

loved

I've loved her as a girlfriend, a woman, a wife, a mother. Now there's another way to add to the list.........stan

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To meet someone who loves and respects and puts it down in verse

I have 2 major muses and of the two, nature is the easiest to write about. Thanks for dropping by..........stan

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Lol the rocker came from Boston. Be pretty hard to get Me that far up north lol...........stan

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Nothing is far in jet age..
I travel the world
in my physical self
as well as imagination

latter mostly
hahaha..

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