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wow what a beauty

Submitted by loved on Wed, 2013-01-30 08:28

wow what a beauty

beauty can’t be bound in any cage,
it lies at each and every stage,
in the eyes of the beholder
that shouldn’t one at all amaze.

some men are more beautiful,
than women of their own age,
women though always remain
longer, much longer on the stage,

love flows from ones’ heart,
sex apart
the beauty is
of your divine gift
a lovely part.

though whatever you may say,
you may live that far away,
but where ever you go
you shall always display,
the one and only one
natural beauty,
in your innocent way,
as your smile does
take my heart away,

I can’t ask you to stay,
as you live in a land far,
very far,
really very far away

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Frenchf

Wed, 2013-01-30 13:36

So agree, but distance is not insurmountable.

scribbler

Wed, 2013-01-30 22:17

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Sometimes distance is a good thing. After all the farther away I am the better I look lol..................stan

loved

Thu, 2013-01-31 03:00

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loved is concerned
tc
i get the msg

loved

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-01-31 03:43

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This is a very good write, seeing that I live so far, far away I suppose you could relate this to me today lol.
It will be impossible to keep up with the mail if you keep telling people.
Best theme I have seen for a long time, I am now going into my "light room" where all the mirrors are, and drink in the beauty LOL.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2013-01-31 04:00

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this poem was composed in 2010
on another site
when I was not with Neopoets

some jealous one got me knocked off
that site for ever...
as the site also owed me 50 dollars
which i donated to CANCER SOCIETY
those guys refuse to pay

Yet this poem was liked by so many
more comments i received then
than I do now
put all together in one day

some of my friends
I send poems to
post it on their walls
with my pseudo-name

I’m indebted to them

loved

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-01-31 04:19

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Stop worrying about what other think, and what others do.
It is their own way of thinking and you will never change that, just you get on and write more pieces to this standard, and as time goes by things will bring in that praise you are yearning for, don't lose sight of the fact that this is a workshop, and others are allowed to be critical without mercy on good and bad works, just take a pinch of salt with it lol.
I have my own site where I am infested with Spam and should any comments come in I haven't the time to go sorting them all out so all are trashed or spammed, and week by week all my works will appear on the site. It is there for my Grandchildren and beyond as they will monitor the site at a later date, I have one category on there titled "others poetry" can't remember what is in there at the moment but it is unpublished poems that are from my friends I have been sent over the years, not sure what to do with them so they stay stored there.
Anyway Loved just write and the world will read, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2013-01-31 04:27

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THANKS Ian you really are a

G R E A T MAN .....IAN

loved

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