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disillusion

Submitted by brittle light on Mon, 2013-01-28 12:57

a long cold season of gray
suddenly
a sunbeam pierces the clouds

why did I not expect it?

maybe predisposition
continually succumbing
to disillusion

but then, THWACK!
smacked blindside

once again,
ambushed by
eureka, joy,
and a boisterous
hallelujah

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crypticbard

Tue, 2013-01-29 07:20

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if only disillusionment where always a pleasant surprise. Or was that boisterous hallelujah a tad sarcastic. I hope not. I am operating from a sleep-deprived point of view. It was still an engaging read, what with the THWACKS, piercing sunbeams and eurekas! Thanks for sharing.

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brittle light

Tue, 2013-02-05 17:45

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see if it strikes you another way

glad to see you reappear here

your work is unique...a great voice

thanks

Al

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