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OLD MAN'S ANSWER
Where is the leader for our day
who will history put forth
one always comes along they say
who by his actions proves his worth
And how does one define love
is it fate or merely chemistry
or someone sent from up above
can any solve this mystery
Why are we put on this earth
is it for purpose or pure chance
when poets give beauty to birth
is it just happy circumstance
Why is it that men fight wars
why do good men turn corrupt
why do some girls turn out whores
why are these questions so abrupt
All these questions, even more
answers sought by all, mayhap
make my old tired brain too sore
I think that I'll just take a nap
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words:
And just what were you expecting lol?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Seren
Sun, 2013-01-27 02:11
Hey Stan
I wasn't sure what to expect lol but more questions get asked with no answer ... Tricky title makes you think your going to get one but you get more questions and yes it makes you think !!
Had fun in chat look forward to the next
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Sun, 2013-01-27 09:59
Hi Jayne
Took this from something I heard a long time ago ;"when I work, I work hard..when I play, I play hard...when I think,I usually fall asleep " lol.................stan
Seren
Mon, 2013-01-28 01:43
Lmao I wish I was able to
Lmao I wish I was able to sleep the longer I think the harder it is to rest
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Mon, 2013-01-28 00:09
forth and worth
forth and worth
I think need consideration ... unless my pronunciation needs amendment
Hi Stan you have yet to place me on your readers list
3 years have lapsed
but I can't show my fist
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2013-01-28 09:52
hi loved
Yeah forth and worth are a bit of a stretch lol. And I don't believe I've ever put Anybody on a readers list............stan