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WHY DO SALMON SWIM UPSTREAM

Submitted by Geremia on Tue, 2013-01-22 19:15

WHY DO SALMON SWIM UPSTREAM

I know the touch of love
and the passion of an embrace
for I am fire
burning embers of life's desire
I don't want to feel
your sad caresses.
I don't want your voice
to speak its tears
or your embraces hold my fears..

let your heart tell me
tomorrow
and hold me close
when tomorrow never comes.

I am fire
I am passion
I know the touch of love.
don't let me see my dying
in your eyes
let me live illusion's lies.

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Ian.T

Wed, 2013-01-23 13:39

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Loved this piece though the title threw me, the flow of love came out, so well and I think one of your best for a while,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Geremia

Wed, 2013-01-23 15:18

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thans Salmon swim upstream to where they began to spawn for the last tiime and die.

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Frenchf

Wed, 2013-01-23 16:06

Some behaviours are programmed. The lemmings too fling themselves over cliffs
Black widow spiders.
Nice title for it

Geremia

Thu, 2013-01-24 00:46

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Yes. I guess it is all in the jeans.

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Ian.T

Thu, 2013-01-24 03:30

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I am damn glad that those fish stay out of my Jeans lol, Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

sueb

Wed, 2013-01-23 19:12

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lovely x

Geremia

Thu, 2013-01-24 00:47

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Thank you. I hesitated posting this poem

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Seren

Fri, 2013-01-25 03:30

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I got the title and the ending of your poem ... it made me feel and thats what a good poem should do ...

nothing to be added or changed like Ian said among some of your best

love always Jayne-Chloe xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Geremia

Fri, 2013-01-25 08:40

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because these are al part of being human and clinging to life.
Am on my way this morning for a new series of lower spinal infusions to ease the pain. I also chose to have surgery to alleviate kidney problem. The risk of going under is worth it. No surgery for PD-I wouldn't make it off the table.

love to my Jayne

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Seren

Sat, 2013-01-26 06:47

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I wish you well Joe from all the way over here I support you
I hope all your treatments go without hitch

Love your Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Sat, 2013-01-26 06:41

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for sharing ere they vanish
all the sperms they still contain
ere...
as you say
the inevitable end
amen
may still hope to meet
in heaven

loved

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