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Regretful Consequentcumstances

After flying extremely high
by my incompetent seat of my pants,
I finally took some time to study
how to turn down an awkward "dance".

Armed with this powerful knowledge
I'd look over both choice's results,
some asessments took me down fairer pathways
and with others, I just missed the boats!

Nonetheless, l owned each purchase
retaining what accompanied each choice,
Silently, I'll remember and regret them
or bellow disdain with my Big Daddy voice!

Life's circumstances completely surround me
coercing me to make judgements, "snap!",
It's those times that sometimes remind me
that either way, I look chock-full of crap!

Though I'm certain I wouldn't dare alter
either path that I've found myself on,
I realize each costly decision
has left me wiser, but with my options all gone!

I believe that whatever the outcome
the value of each lesson holds true,
with all consequentcumstances considered
my regrets end up being rather few!

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Your title caught my attention! The presentation is clever and feels light-hearted. However, I find much wisdom in your words! My favorite lines are:

Though I'm certain I wouldn't dare alter
either path that I've found myself on,
I realize each costly decision
has left me wiser, but with my options all gone!

I believe that whatever the outcome
the value of each lesson holds true,
with all consequentcumstances considered
my regrets end up being rather few!

I much enjoyed reading your philosophies! Thank You!

always, Cat

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Another journey with you, and a good one, I was wondering if the long word:-consequentcumstances would be better if it had a couple more letters consequentialcumstances would sound a lot better me thinks but that is just me, otherwise all is OK, Yours Ian.T

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