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Submitted by loved on Sun, 2013-01-13 03:37

just about great

poets must compose
so that many continue to search
the heart of the creator at that moment
I step into the soul of my subject
to imagine how I'd feel
had I been the one in that situation
none-the less,
each one must have one’s own fibre
to brave the knife
the sword,
the curse
the slicing tongue
how can I ever be all in one
so my feelings are the outcome
of one’s peculiar situation
as at that moment

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Nordic cloud

Sun, 2013-01-13 10:02

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This has a surrealist leaning and is rather fascinating
with its cursive run down the page, tumbling words out
like the splashes from a romping stream through the rocks.
It can be read with so many different meanings.

Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

loved

Sun, 2013-01-13 10:38

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honoured

Literature or art produced in this style.

my grateful thanks

loved

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Seren

Mon, 2013-01-14 06:52

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I think this is one of the best poems I have read from you I cant find anything to fault

well done and Bravo

I reread this a couple of times it has a quality I havent seen in your work(or I may have missed)before

love JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Mon, 2013-01-14 06:56

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so many times
you have encouraged me
and ma'am too

so now I think
someday,
one day
I will also become like a poet like both of you
god willing Neopoets continue to read me
and help support a weakling
whose poetic sense
is just an imaginary inkling

loved

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Seren

Mon, 2013-01-14 07:00

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I give credit where its due and this is a wonderful poem you should be proud of and if anyone doesnt agree they can bite my *** smiles

I am still learning to be a poet and I will still be learning until the day I die but thank you for the lovely compliment

love JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

loved

Mon, 2013-01-14 07:49

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poetic friend
I adore you for the guts you show
and
also I'd like that
you know so...

loved

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