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Forget-us-not

Submitted by sueb on Thu, 2012-12-20 16:55

Oh, your love has untethered, unbound me
Heart beats an intimate dance, called romance
Your gnawing need for me, and mine for thee
consumes, alternate reality, a trance
I'm floating on cloud nine, sweet ecstasy
Ah, can this last eternally? perchance
Reflected gaze I feel like a beauty
My feelings broad as the oceans expanse
Your my soulmate, my best friend, my happy
No formula, not an exact science
except one on one, may add upto three
I appreciate our dalliance
Flirting is the fuel that keeps love red hot
tempted by another forget-us-not

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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scribbler

Mon, 2013-01-07 09:36

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very emotive. Were it me I'd break it into stanzas but that's just me. And the varied rhyme pattern does not detract.............stan

sueb

Mon, 2013-01-07 09:52

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thanks scribbler just trying different forms my attempt at a sonnet lol glad u enjoyed cheers sueb x

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