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role reversal

wake up, my love,
the sun is up,
you are yet asleep…
the sun-rays are waiting for thee
as you awake the glow of my face,
you will really see.

wake up my love,
the time has come to go…

how on this earth you wish to stay,
yet have your own way,
without the soul of life,
which as we all know is honey.
for that to beget,
a son we have not yet,

so my love, go to work
earn some money.
when you come home,
after your labor and toil,
i shall wait with open arms;

upon your lips
I surely will a kiss plant.

for the present stay and smile,
get up my dear for this one while,
for office is approaching.
so bye, bye for the next full day

when you return home,
love i shall lovingly display.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

The theme is OK but the whole story becomes a little ragged , just needs a read and a tidy up.
It has the bones of a good poem from you,
Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

as also tell me where
I've failed in the poetic battle!!
haahhaa
I love your comments
they put in my mind
some horse sense...

HAPPY NEW YEAR
as 31st is round the corner
all over..

loved

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