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The Lullaby Tree

Submitted by sueb on Mon, 2012-12-10 15:33

Shook me a branch on the Lullaby Tree
sweet melodic air wafted by me slowly
my eyes started to close unwittingly
soft mystery of the Lullaby Tree

Hypnotised by the whisper of the Lullaby Tree
magical dreamland drifted into me
flying on clouds of heavenly reverie
the wistful sound of the Lullaby Tree

Wanted to stay forever under the Lullaby Tree
peace and serenity enveloping me
but breeze brought me back to reality
precious time spent under the Lullaby Tree

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Ian.T

Wed, 2012-12-26 04:07

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Your quiet rhyme and sing song are excellent, now I am sleepy as all those Lullaby Tree's have got to me.
Now we know that you can rhyme without a problem can we try Couplets then on to greater things, can you try a story in around five Stanzas???
Look forward to your next works, Yours Ian.T

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sueb

Wed, 2012-12-26 07:54

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thanks very much Ian T actually hummed when writing this one glad u enjoyed all the best sueb x

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