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your essence
Close your eyes.
Let me lead you by the beach,
As the wind takes your hair
Along the velvet skyline.
Let me lead you by the beach,
As the wind takes your hair
Along the velvet skyline.
The sun visable..
Thought a minor figure
Compared to your beauty.
Your very essence appeals to those in doubt,
And misleads the portrait of itself
To see you smile, priceless
As even my vision isnt perfect
I can see you 20/20
Your my hearts rival,
And in that can do no harm
Thought a minor figure
Compared to your beauty.
Your very essence appeals to those in doubt,
And misleads the portrait of itself
To see you smile, priceless
As even my vision is not correct
I can see you 20/20
Your my hearts rival,
And in that can do no harm.
Bliss is what you bring
Today is not nearly enough..i need u now
Tommorrow,
Forever, and thereafter
Open your eyes
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all my writing is on love. its what i like to write about the most.
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Ian.T
Wed, 2012-12-26 04:34
Jay
I have played with the words and put them on PM for you to see.
Hope this will help in your future writes, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..