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Every Other

Decidedly a blues tune
with it's haunting melody,

paving the way
for shades of grey,
as Autumn undresses every other tree;

and I notice in every other pair
of eyes, I look into...

..a tear, with so much sadness
it reminds my eyes of a time I cried for you.

Then, my chest begins to catch it's breath
and my eyes can't stop the "blur",
and I wanna go back to the way things used to be;

there is no doubt in my heart
how lucky we both were,
when your eyes.....they used to smile, because of me.

Definately a minor key
where the notes bend in, and out...

been in those shoes
and, I've paid my dues,
every other soul knows what I'm on, about.

And, I notice in every other pair
of eyes, I look into...

..a tear, with so much sorrow,
it reminds my eyes of a time I cried for, you.

Then, my chest begins to catch it's breath
and, my eyes can't stop the "blur",
and, I wanna go back to the way things used to be;

there is no doubt in my heart
how lucky we both were,
when your eyes.....they used to smile, because of me.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I can see, now.....it's a bit of a "song". Didn't intend for that to appear. doc.
Editing stage: 

Comments

..you know, I think it may be a potential song. Who knows, right tune, and singer.....
love your life,
doc.

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author comment

LOVE IT

Dear Doc. this is very beautiful poem from the heart.

Mona Rose

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