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Ringing of steel
Slams as it closed
Made with bars
for be juxtaposed

Turning of key
Snap of the lock
Prison is made
Of concrete and block

No crime committed
Yet price be paid
Sins from another
Onto me was laid

Six long years
I will patiently stitch
A master plan
go off without hitch

For I know
That we both know
Who really is the lier
When I get out of here
I'm bringing brimstone and fire

Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
Just a write I been thinking about. I am unsure of the tittle and it may need an extra verse. Let me know what you think.
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Comments

I really dont think it needs an extra verse but if you feel it needs it go for it !

I really liked the poem I look forward to reading more from you kudos

sincerely Jayne-Chloe

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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