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Cold

I remember the way that you touched me
the way that you hand felt in mine,
your lips were so soft
.
In my mind’s eye I capture
the way that you looked at me,.
as if you loved me too much.

Vowed our love was eternal
with every word you uttered,
and deed completed.

But now you’re cold
icy, as frigid air,
the chill winds blow.

I live and breathe despair
but you won’t return.
I am unloved

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Thanks

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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A sad ending - but one that many will relate to.

Thank you for sharing

Love Mand xxxxxxxx

this was inspired by a very old relationship.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Lou, though I love poetry born from a lover's rejection and know intimately its pain, I will this time speak as I would to my daughter....

Know that life has a series of lovers for you. And the one that left only left you because there are many lovers yet to be known. He made room for them to enter your life. And each lover brings you the same gift with their leaving.

~A

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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The feeling is real, but the realationship was long ago.

thank you

love always lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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