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lavendar

Submitted by Esker on Mon, 2012-11-26 01:42

covet silk winds
across quiet brocade shadows
a brutal fist of
hail beneath the anvils
of summer
lay down the pleasant
sash of wealth

a wrath of war
for harvest lush
ambrosial slaughter
rising in the mists

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Mon, 2012-11-26 02:00

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I detect the odor of the forest after a storm. The smell of the slow burning of mold beneath the pine needles and the waft of a warm scent that accompanies a beautiful dawn.~ Gee

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Esker

Mon, 2012-11-26 16:32

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I imagined lavender fields
something Ive never seen much
of... Strange that I like its scent

after the ice has broken it down
the summer anvil heads

I like that all the poetry described as
so brief brings forth so much to everyone

I like the pines very much
the darkness in the thick of them
foreboding mysterious and peaceful

and that hot dawn breath
befoere the sun strikes
weary and taxing

Thank You

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Ross Hamilton Hill

Tue, 2012-11-27 15:24

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There is a town in north Ontario,
With dream comfort memory to spare,
And in my mind. I still need a place to go,
All my changes were there.
Neil Young

your definitely in the right place to write poetry
always good to read your work
ross

Esker

Tue, 2012-11-27 22:19

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correct...a most un nerving and place of taut politeness
and mystery....

thank you

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