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Sundial

Sundial

Before time,
as we have come
to know it

a shadow
pinpointed
not only the hour
but the direction
of our destiny.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Goodnight Mrs. Calabash, wherever you are.
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Comments

I think the title very apt, However the body of the poem seems to extend far beyond the message contained. I would suggest a shorter version to add to the impact LMAO................scribbler

I have missed your wit.

I guess this new format will take some getting used to.

Sue

author comment

Niiice!

~A

p.s. Please forgive me my penchant for florid mispelings.

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