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the last of me

Submitted by loved on Sat, 2012-11-17 04:24

old,
which is gold
never mind still I will appear
as yesterday there would have been a tear
when I fell almost to finality
ere fatality
my deafness and the road least taken
were at fault,
as I took the tunnel of darkness
to avoid wrath
there was then the calamity
I wanted you to know
wow, fell flat in the darkness
no one knows,
yet in pain with broken arms
a shattered shin
and a twisted knee
all the pain got better of me,
as fatality
relatives all turned docs to salvage
ere the end!
but I am sure you are glad too to see
my flash across your page once again,
how happy now are you?
Or are you?

I survived that you can see
but my memory
took away my expertise
of writing poetry
extemporary!!!

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

scribbler

Sat, 2012-11-17 04:40

Hi loved

Perhaps we should form a local chapter of THE SOCIETY FOR THE SICK LAME AND LAZY. Hope your recovery is going well.........stan

Ian.T

Sat, 2012-11-17 04:43

Loved

Just a temporary Break you had.
Just reminded me of when in Africa I went to a local Restaurant to have an evening meal, it was all OK when I parked the car then I turned the lights out switched all off and locked car, off I went to go straight to the Restaurant.
Forgot the kerb stones they had there to separate the parking spots, and went ass over head tore trousers and a shirt and was bleeding a bit, spent the next half hour cleaning myself up in the toilet of the food place, then I went home without eating, LOL It's not Funny...
Liked this journey into pain,
I am glad that the Bard,
is fully functional again,
Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sat, 2012-11-17 04:52

so beautiful

but glad
in my case not a drop of blood was shed
not an iota of hair lost .... coz i am already bald
no pants parted
but then who knows
the internal bleeding twas
or twas not
till a week later
watch
says a real doc///>>>

loved

author comment

loved

Sat, 2012-11-17 04:54