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In the seeds of sunflowers

Between the fibers
of this page,
an ancient magic
has been laid

Pressing leaves
with mystical power,
kissing the corners
to grow sunflowers

Cherish a word
a wish or rhyme,
making it grow
deep in your mind

Taking the letters
that are your divine,
weave them into
a master design

Make your own mold
and pour yourself in,
to not be yourself
is the greater of sins

Feel the earth
beneath your feet,
build your own kingdom
a heartlands retreat

With the gift of hands
you can shape a world,
and the only barrier
is what your mind holds

Sowing the seeds
you collected through life,
tend them with love
they will flourish with light

Dream with your heart
and ever be true,
the universe will gather
just to know you

After searching for faults
letting pride blind my eyes,
I stripped off all masks
to soar a blue sky

Now planting my seed
with love in my sight,
I wish it to flourish
a precious long life

Covering these pages
in tendrils sublime,
Thus binding loves magic
I send it through time

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i don't read this as free verse as you have tagged it

beautiful quatrains - you should pop it into my workshop - lol even if you don't write any more form poems you still will have contributed to mine with a perfect example of one ... let me know if you will and i'll add you to the participant's list...

i so love the most
'Dream with your heart
and ever be true,
the universe will gather
just to know you '

love judd
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I would love to add this one to your workshop I will work on it a little while I am gone I wont be back till monday, is that too late ? I would also love to attempt more forms so I will take a through look at the workshop and its rules thanks for the read and comment glad you liked it

love n hugs JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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is ongoing

fixed verse – it's not a curse

and long term

you can come and go as you please and put any poem form you come across into the shop no matter how far back it was introduced - and you don't have to submit every form - only the ones that interest you

come along i'll add you now

xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I look forward to the workshop I will add a few I havent submited here most of them rhyming, and a few different forms I am playing with ... your workshop sounds awesome and flexable for me

I will post my poem on Monday night when I get back I will be looking for something to distract me

love and hugs JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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so now you click on edit and go to the workshop box and highlight fixed verse

add all future poems this way - all workshop poems go into an extra stream as well as the main stream - and each workshop stream is found at the right hand side of the workshop page
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I think I did it right let me know if I screwed up been having one of those days no sleep doesnt help lol
see you on monday take care

love n hugs JC xxx

I just noticed it came up in the workshop so I think I did it right lol ....

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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if you look under your poem where you have your review request, you'll see it listed under the workshop :)
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Thanks for the invite I have a couple of forms I have been playing with that are giving me grief I will submit them here and hopefully get some world class help ;)

I will try and write something new for monday

love n hugs JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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I really enjoyed the line 'make your own mold and pour yourself in'...like you can take on any form...I like the allusion in that. I'm sure this will be thoroughly critiqued in Judyanne's workshop, but as she said, it's a good model to start with. I'm still not confident enough with quatrains...but i'll get there and let Judyanne rip it up! LOL

Ells x

I didnt write this one in any particular form, I just wrote it, I have been playing on and off with this poem for nearly two years, its time it got finished lol

thanks for the comment and the read its always appreciated

love and hugs JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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something to work with ?

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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