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some loving wives

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2012-11-12 23:56

I have seen tougher wives
but
thank god
I ain't not your hubby

and

perhaps
he too deserves some empathy
I love to send him my sympathy

all here are
wonderful poets
independent
self taught mostly

you seem to be at the wrong end
of this elite
this site adds beauty
to all poetry ,
free verse may it be truly
so express yourself
freely friendly and vociferously

HAPPY DIVALI
to all Indians across the globe.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Wed, 2012-11-14 03:59

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I see you are struggling with someone else's problems lol
I is trawling through the Undiscovered works at the moment and always sort yours first as I know it means a lot to know it has been read.
I hope this finds you well..
.
Two naughty typo's, well the first is a double negative:-
.
" I ain't not your hubby"
now you know that two negatives make a positive..
.
Diwali 2012 : Tuesday, November 13. Wish your family and friends "Shubh Diwali or is it spelt with a V in the States..

I put some of my work on another poetry site at the moment, that every time you want to put something on the site, before it is sanctioned you have to comment on at least two other works, I find this really good as it helps all that submit poetry.
Take care young Bard and keep writing, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Fri, 2012-11-16 08:42

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so that you have
at least one guy
commenting on your
newest site

loved

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