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Guileful Mask
No man can win without love
Being wise can give you power
Men seeks happiness their own way
What makes man feel the way they do?
No man can be powerful without strength
Strength is given by loving others
A soul loves for he wants love
Who gives love when hate is given?
No man can be strong without faith
A soul is made from faith
God made faith for he is faith
Why care if you are your own?
No man can love without a soul
Faith brings love to a heart of stone
Wiseness answers questions not asked
What makes wrong, wrong in life?
No man knows all the answers
But all men want to find it
This world is ours to live on
We live in foolishness and
So we die in foolishness
Nalanti Goosen©2012
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Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I wrote this poem quite a few years back but never got to really do some serious editing on it. I'm hoping that I can edit this poem to the point where it looses it's preachy-ness and be more of something that will be thought provoking
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Comments
Nordic cloud
Fri, 2012-11-09 11:09
If the man is a man as
If the man is a man as opposed to a woman, then I would say we are different.
I cannot crit this not believing in God, I suppose either.
Its a little more like prose here and there, as it rhythm is not so clear, for me!
Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.