Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

JOY-STEALER

Submitted by BettyBuff on Thu, 2012-11-08 04:20

Your Joy-Stealer
will drain
clear
de-stable

It flows like
toxic spill
bubbles and
festers
in you

Light and dark
Joy and misery
Ebb and flow

Who will know
the

Dark in your tunnel?
dark in your head?
dark in your exit?

So, no escape
it's a bleak
thief

Takes no prisoners
this Joy-Stealer

You could be wise
confident
smiling

Then the creeping
assailant strikes!

Dark in your tunnel
dark in your head
dark in your exit

So no escape
it's a bleak
thief

Death, the
Joy-Stealer's
friend
crowns the ultimate prize

Relief.

Last few words: 
For those of us fighting dark battles...
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Candlewitch

Thu, 2012-11-08 11:30

Candlewitch's picture
Volunteer badge

I very much enjoyed this dark poem! For I have a dark and twisted monster lurking in the depth of me. He is my male alter ego that writes by the name of eddy styx. I loved these lines:

Who will know
the

Dark in your tunnel?
dark in your head?
dark in your exit?

So, no escape
it's a bleak
thief

always, Cat (& eddy)

*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

BettyBuff

Fri, 2012-11-09 04:34

BettyBuff's picture

Thanks Cat,

Appreciate your comments...was having a dark day yesterday...my glass was definitely half empty!

'Betty'

author comment

Seren

Fri, 2012-11-09 07:32

Seren's picture

I love this dark write of yours its flows from one stanza to the next with smooth precision ... I have missed reading you, you have a style all your own but I think I have told you that before lol

I cant pick a favourite stanza I love tham all sorry I couldnt offer something more constructive

hugs~ JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.