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Codependence

Submitted by Sassy the Ass Kat on Wed, 2012-10-24 04:06

I sit here with a mangled heart,
And I apologize for it.
I am torn and I want to mend you.
I am broken almost beyond repair,
yet I want to heal you,
I am bleeding to death
And I bandage you up.
I am devastated,
but I look for ways to keep you afloat.
I am beyond repair.
You know this is true.
Still you accept all of my gestures.
My last breath will be I love you
and you will merely say I know.

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Free verse
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Ian.T

Wed, 2012-10-24 04:16

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A love of another beyond words and actions, a true heart piece.
Though it would be lovely if the other one would also help you to mend,.
Good write and Welcome to Neopoet I hope your walk with us here will be a beautiful restful experience, but mind you I hope you have a sense of humour it will help lol,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

introvert

Wed, 2012-10-24 11:12

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Your poem blew me away...thank heavens I was sitting down.

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