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Tommorow
Today i am filled with anger
fueled with hidden hate
scared of being outcast
afaid of common fate
today is built on tragedies
which no one wants to face
nightmares to humanities
and moprally disgraced
tonight is filled with rage
violence in the air
children bred in ruthlessness
because no one at cares
tonight i lay down
but the pressure never stops
knawing my sanity
content when i am dropped
but tommorow i see change
a chance to build something new
built on spiritual intent of heart and ideals
based on truth
and tommorow i wake with second wind
and strong because of pride
to know i fought with all my heart
to keep my dream alive
Last few words:
hit me
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STA
Fri, 2012-10-12 17:08
hit me
hit me
author commentSTA
Fri, 2012-10-12 17:08
hit me
hit me
author commentSTA
Fri, 2012-10-12 17:09
tommorow
hit me
author commentSTA
Fri, 2012-10-12 17:10
hit me as hard as u can
hit me as hard as u can
author commentIan.T
Fri, 2012-10-12 17:56
Sta
Firdtly welcome to Neopoet may your journey with us be a good one where you can be free and talk of anything to all that are here.
I have lived in Sth Africa and understand the problems all the people face.
This poem points out a few of them.. It is a good write..
Try and split it up a little into stanzas/verses, it will give the reader a break, though sometimes I feel you wont want that, but it is a thing that happens.
Join one of the workshops, widen you visions of life, there is so much you can shout at the world, we and they eventually will hear your voice,
Yours Ian.T
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Geezer
Fri, 2012-10-12 22:41
I was sorely...
tempted to just say welcome and that I would come back later, but...I never know when later will be, so I have decided to leave my comments now. I agree that it could be a little smoother. However, I got to thinking that maybe it might be set to a rythm that I did not hear. Rap maybe? Anyhow, I also agree that you can learn lots here if that is what you are here for. I will be back later for a better look at this one. ~ Geezer
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